Pretty Crazy

Hello! Welcome to YWS! :elephant: Good introduction. But it's very short . . . you might be able to hook more readers if you gave them a glimpse of what's ...

Very interesting. I like how the narrator talks to you like he (or is it a she?) is actually writing this. I didn't see any spelling or grammar errors, but- ...

Um, try: idiot Oh I know! Add a few more words! That might work! Like this: I was a stupid, selfish, idiot. Or something like that. :D

Yay! :elephant: Thanks for posting this early! Wow . . . I was literally sitting on the edge of my seat. It wasn't that suspenseful, but soooo interesting. I love ...

:lol: I like your writing style! It's very characteristic. Your idea looks original. But may I point out a few things? 1. Everything is a bit rushed, describing things will ...

Whoa! That's good! I love the lighting; the barn is in the sun and the surroundings are not. It must be hard waiting for the sun to what you want. ...

Yeah! Now you're moving! This chapter was just as amazing as the others. I don't know how you did it, but somehow you managed to balance background stories and action ...

Pretty. All we got was a dusting of snow. :( I like the second one the best, the snow just setting on the branches looks really neat. The first one ...

I like how you use the different senses in this poem. Sorry to say, the words don't flow, it's hard to get an image in your head when you read ...

Preface: I stood up and walked to the door. I was standing alone. All alone. I touched the knob and felt it's cool metal against my smooth hand. I took ...

We slept in circles this night, with a fire inside it. Wouldn't that sound better? It goes with the past tense better. I wasn't completely shocked when Kyran said he ...

Welcome!! :mrgreen: :elephant: I hope you have fun, this is an awesome site. It's a great place to grow as a writer. Um, I'm not very good with the rules ...

I like the lighting of it. One of the trees seem to catch the sun's light while the others are silhouetted. Nice picture. Good job. :)

It's a good idea. But it needs something to make it unique. There are all kinds of stories like this out there. Show us what you have that is different. ...

Hello. Me again. As usual, I don't have any criticism. But it's always nice to know people read your story. That was so intense, you could have made Ash try ...